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12:30 am
Hello~ I’m your student Beigeman Sung-hoon.
Your website is so cool~ :-)
I hope to enhance my english ability, especially writing skill~
and as much as I can, I wish to assist your website more plentiful~
so I would leave a writing about Korean history.
in my opinion, to catch the country’s history is good for people to learn about it’s culture.
above all modern history has the most importance for them to understand the country’s present.
please check my piece and give me some informative advise~
I think, there will be a lot of grammar or vocabulary mistake…
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The Summary of Modern History of Korea
In Korea, before the 1900s, there was the nation ‘Joseon Dynasty’ which established at 1392 (at 1446, our king ‘Sejong’ created our written language ‘han-geul’). at that time, the Joseon was decaying little by little with it’s corrupted power.
Actually, before 18th century, Korea was above Japan. in oriental history, the order of level of civilization was always China – Korea – Japan. we exported the Chinese character to Japan at the 300s, Buddhism at the 500s, and advanced pottery at the 1500s, etc.
From 18th century, Japan imported the great marvel of western civilization very successfully and accorded their culture into that very swiftly and cleverly. Japan was developing more and more. but sadly, Joseon didn’t do that. Joseon even closed it’s trade gate and declined more and more…
After all, at the 1900s, Japan attacked Joseon with their advanced army and technology and make Joseon it’s colony at 1910.
In the colonial period, we lost by Japan our power, wealth, tradition, custom… everything. except our nationalism. we resisted against Japan with hard patriotism. eventually, when the nuclear bomb made a huge explosion on the Hirosima and Japan surrendered in World War II, Korea was independent from Japan at 1945.
Although we accomplished independence, our society was in chaos. we didn’t have proper government, useful property, and unity. after all, we separated. the South Korea was established at 1948.08.15. and North Korea was established at 1948.09.09.
And at 1950, there was a war : The Korean War. at 1950.06.15. the North Korea suddenly attacked the South with great of military strength, at first, South was defeated to Busan. but with the rescue force of UN which almost consisted of US army, South defeated North to around border of the North Korea. but at the moment, the China helped the North with their huge amount of military forces and the war became prolonged war. eventually the two Forces made truce at 1953.
As a result of the War. our land was destroyed totally. there was nothing at all. everything was collapsed and everyone was poor. Korea was the poorest nation in the world. at that time even the Ethiopia helped us by some meal.
And,
At the 1960s, we began to reconstruct our nation on the ruins of war.
At the 1970s, we succeeded in Industrial Revolution.
At the 1980s, we succeeded in Democratic Revolution.
At the 1990s, we succeeded in Information Revolution.
At the 2000s, we succeeded in Globalization.
And now, we are in front of the gate of advanced nation.
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how about this..? actually, after the war, our history is very complicated.
so I don’t know that period’s history well.. 
but anyway that is correct summary I learned~
I think, whatever in this writing is right or wrong,
this try itself gives me some good improvement.
thanks for giving me canvas to draw~ ^^
and please check check~
Hey Beige Man, thanks for the post!
Here are your corrections. My advice and thoughts are in brackets[ ] or written after "Note:" Words in bold are places where I changed something.
In Korea, before the 1900s, there was the ‘Joseon Dynasty’ which began in 1392 [to say when something happened, used in before the year. I'll let you correct the rest] (at 1446, King Sejong created our written language, ‘han-geul’). At [begin sentences with a capital letter. I’ll let you do the rest] that time , the Joseon Dynasty was decaying little by little from corruption.
Note: "At that time" refers to the last time mentioned; here it would be 1392.
From 18th century, Japan imported the great marvel of Western civilization very successfully and adjusted their culture into that very swiftly and cleverly. Japan was developing more and more. but sadly, Joseon didn’t do that. Joseon even closed it’s trade gate and declined more and more…
Note: it sounds like you are casual friends with Joseon! Make sure to give him an honorific title, such as “King” or refer to the “Joseon dynasty,” not simply “Joseon.”
After all, at the 1900s, Japan attacked Joseon with their advanced army and technology and made Joseon its colony at 1910. In the colonial period, we lost our power to Japan: wealth, tradition, customs… everything, except our nationalism. we resisted against Japan with hard patriotism. In 1945, when the nuclear bomb made a huge explosion in Hirosima and Japan surrendered in World War II, Korea gained independence from Japan.
Although we accomplished independence, our society was in chaos. we didn’t have proper government, useful property, or unity. after all, we separated. South Korea was established at 1948.08.15. and North Korea was established at 1948.09.09.
Note: use the before plural country names or countries that begin with "United." But omit the for other country titles. See the articles section for more details.
And at 1950, there was a war: The Korean War. at 1950.06.15. North Korea suddenly attacked the South with great military strength, at first, the South was defeated and had to retreat to Busan. but with the rescue force of the UN, which almost consisted of US army, South defeated the North and pushed them to around border of the North Korea. but at that moment, China helped the North with their huge military forces and the war became prolonged. eventually the two Forces made a truce at 1953.
As a result of the War, our land was totally destroyed. there was nothing at all. everything was collapsed and everyone was poor. Korea was the poorest nation in the world. at that time even the Ethiopia helped us with some meals. [Wow, I didn’t know that!]
At the 1960s, we began to reconstruct our nation on the ruins of war.
At the 1970s, we succeeded in the Industrial Revolution.
At the 1980s, we succeeded in the Democratic Revolution.
At the 1990s, we succeeded in the Information Revolution.
At the 2000s, we succeeded in Globalization.
And now, we are in front of the gate of being an advanced nation.
Tip: After you've finished writing, use the spell checker function on whatever program you used to type. If you're using Word, then it'll show red lines for spelling mistakes and green lines for grammatical/ punctuation errors.
9:48 pm
Thank you for the helpful correction and advise for me ~ ^^
even though I tried my best, there are so many things that I have to fix.. ㅠㅠ;;
but, I feel, I have learned a lot from this. thanks~
yep~ I will try my best ever! until I can make the English mine!!
see you~ 
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